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Dearest sister,

The air is so warm today. I haven't felt its like in so long, I feel like I've been reborn. Recovering from withdrawals and being shut in for weeks can do that to a person. The sky is so vast. Feels like I'm gonna fall up into it. There are moments where I just stroll around the complex, admiring the openness and beauty. Other times I run like I'm being chased. It's so new but old, so intriguing and terrifying. Nobody should feel like this, sis. Ever. The drugs robbed me of being human, and I'll never forgive them for that. But I'm healing, and one day I'll be cleansed of this taint.

I just wanted to send you this postcard so that you would know I'm alive. It's been years and I know you worry. I can't tell you where I am. I know you. You'll try to find me, and we can't have that. You can't see me like this. I won't let you. It's better this way.

You'll see me when I'm whole again.

You'll see me when I'm worthy of you and the rest of our family. You're with me in spirit; that's helping me go on. And I know you're angry, but I hope that one day I'll turn that anger to pride and forgiveness.

Love,

Your Brat of a Sister
Yet another Creative Writing prompt.
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Niksche Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the way you capture "Brat's" sense of invigoration and freedom in the first paragraph. And then you get a fuller sense of why. For such a brief piece, you manage to convey so much with an economy of words. It's engaging, gets the wheels of imagination turning, questions buzzing: Where is she? How long has she been there? How much longer will she be there? How did she get there? How long have the sisters been apart? Why does Brat think there is anger, a need for forgiveness? The emotions at play in this piece shift so rapidly -- buoyant joy, anger, regret, guilt, determination -- it drives this piece like a freight train, unstoppable.
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SillySmiley Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi, SeventhRain!

I saw your piece pop up in my notifications for TheWritersMeow and decided to take a look. I'd like to say that this piece seems like one of the most genuine letter-style writings I've ever read. The wording wasn't trite, as can happen, I've noticed, in writing this style. It was so short, but seemed to tell a much bigger story. Great job.

One thing I did notice, though, is that in the second sentence, you write "I haven't felt its like in so long..." Is "like" supposed to be "life" instead, perhaps? 
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SeventhRain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Student Writer
I'm glad you took the time out to read it, and that you enjoyed it! :D

It's supposed to be "like." Hope that wasn't too confusing?
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SillySmiley Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The phrase just didn't quite make sense in my head or when I said it out loud, though I just might be reading it incorrectly or not quite understanding what it means. Since "its" was used as a possessive noun (instead of the contraction it's for "it is") it seems like the following word in your sentence should be a noun instead of "like." 

Like if you were to say, for example "The house's lawn is green" and you wanted to replace "The house's" with "it." The sentence would be "Its lawn is green." Lawn being the noun possessed by "it." 

And I only suggested "life" since you mentioned in the following clause being "reborn." :)

I hope this doesn't sound too nit-picky. I had only wanted to point it out in case it was a typo, but it could just be my mistake in misreading. ^^
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SeventhRain Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Student Writer
Well in this case the term "its" is describing the warm air, and "its like" is something she hasn't felt in a long time, which makes her feel reborn. Does it make sense now? :)
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Student Writer
Very interesting! I'd love expansion beyond just the prompt.
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CaidenAlexandria Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Student Writer
Wow, this was heart throbbing for me. You did well, very well.
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